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City Comptroller Alan Hevesi, a possible Mayoral candidate in this year's
Democratic primary, spoke at yesterday's vigil on 1157 Wheeler Avenue, but
was heckled and booed by a crowd of thousands when he made some inappropriate,
disrespectful and ill-timed comments about reconciliation with the NYPD,
according to the crowds.
You might try this for the 2nd graf.
People say the event, which the family requested be called a vigil and
not a protest, to remember Diallo's humble life, was almost single-handedly
spoiled by Hevesi and it seemed that the taunts and jeers was irreversible.
how about :
Community members
said they or displayed anger that Hev...
were angered that Hevesi, who is a firm advocate of gay and lesbian rights,
and was a grand marshal of one of the city's Gay parades a few years ago, would speak about zero
tolerance a few feet away from parents like Sekou Diallo, and Iris Baez, whose children were
tragically killed because of such policies. Some felt Alan Hevesi almost turned what was to be a
celebration and remembrance of Diallo's life into a campaign event.
"Hevasi has been booed twice now," might be stronger here. "Once before during a Rev..."
The event marks a second time Hevesi was booed; During a Rev. Martin Luther King Jr. at
Sharpton's National Action Network, when Hevesi, according to the Daily News, claimed he didn't
believe there was a serious problem between cops and the minority community, but changed his
thinking after the fatal shooting of Patrick Dorismond.
A formal transcript of Hevesi's remarks, promised to Indymedia by Hevesi's office was not yet
available as this was being written. The following is a rough transcript.
Only other suggestion, use "police officer" or "law enforcement" instead of cop
if this is going anywhere somewhat mainstreamish.
marco
ps:
if you wanna strengthen that lead paragraph even more, you might
move the crowd opinion to the very second line.
for example: (para 'jemplo)
City Comptroller Alan Hevesi, a possible Mayoral candidate in this year's
Democratic primary was heckled and booed by a crowd of thousands, when he
spoke at yesterday's vigil on 1157 Wheeler Avenue.
People say he'd made some inappropriate, disrespectful and ill-timed
comments about reconciliation with the NYPD. They felt the event, which
the family requested be called a vigil and not a protest, to remember
Diallo's humble life, was almost single-handedly spoiled by Hevesi and
it seemed that the taunts and jeers was irreversible.
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